Comments on: Ishtehaar – Shiv Kumar Batalvi

By: rashi

rashi — Mon, 11 May 2009 10:31:14 +0000

Shikra – The Hawk

Maae! Ni maae!
MaeN ik shikra yaar banaaiya.
Uhde sir te kalgi,
Te uhde paereeN jhaaNjhar,
Te o chog chugeeNda aaiya.
Ni maeN vaari jaaN!

Ik uhde roop di
Dhup tikheri,
Dooja mahikaaN da tirhaaiya,
Teeja uhda raNg gulaabi
Kise gori ma da jaaiya.
Ni maeN vaari jaaN!

Naeni uhde
Chet di aathan,
Ate zulfeeN saavan CHaaya.
HoTHaaN de vich kahte da
Koi dihooN chaRne te aaiya.
Ni maeN vaari jaaN!

SaahvaaN de vich
Phul soiyaaN de
Kise baag chanan da laaiya.
Dehi deh vich kheDe chetar,
ItraaN naal nuhaaiya.
Ni maeN vaari jaaN!

BolaaN de vich
Paun pure di,
Ni o koyilaaN da hamsaaya.
ChiTe daNd jyuN dhaano bagala,
TauRi maar uDaaiya.
Ni maeN vaari jaaN!

Ishke da
Ik palaNgh nuwaari
AsaaN chaananiyaaN vich Daahiya.
Tan di chaadar ho gayi maeli
Us paer ja palaNghe paaiya.
Ni maeN vaari jaaN!

Dukhan mere
NaenaaN de koye,
Vich haR haNjhuaaN da aaiya.
Saari raat gayi vich sochaaN
Us e ki zulam kamaaiya.
Ni maeN vaari jaaN!

Subaah savere
Lae ni vaTana
AsaaN mal mal us nuhaaiya.
Dehi vichoN niklan chingaaN
Te saaDa hath giya kumhalaaiya.
Ni maeN vaari jaaN!

Choori kuTaaN
Te o khaaNda naaheeN
Uhnu dil da maas khavaaiya.
Ik uDaari aesi maari
O muR vatani na aaiya.
Ni maeN vaari jaaN!

Maae! Ni maae!
MaeN ik shikra yaar banaaiya.
Uhde sir te kalgi
Te uhde paereeN jhaaNjhar,
Te o chog chugeeNda aaiya.
Ni maeN vaari jaaN!

By: rashi

rashi — Mon, 11 May 2009 10:30:30 +0000

Ishtehaar

ik kuRi jidaa naam muhabbat gum hai, gum hai gum hai
saad muraadi soni phabbat, gum hai, gum hai gum hai

suurat osdi pariyaaN vargi, seerat di o Mariam lagdi
hasdi hai taaN phul jhaRde ne, Turdi hai taa Ghazal hai lagdi
lamm-salammi, saru de kad di, umr aje hai marke agg di
par nainaa di gal samajhdii

ik kuRi jidaa naam muhabbat
gum hai gum hai gum hai

gummeyaaN janam janam han hoye, par lagda jyoN kal di gal hai
yuuN lagda jyoN ajj di gal hai, yuuN lagda jyoN hun di gal hai
hune taaN mere kol khaRi si, hune taaN mere kol nahiiN hai
eh ki chhal hai, eh kii phaTkan, soch meri hairaan baRii hai
nazar meri har aaNde jaaNde, chahre daa rang phol rahii hai
os kuRi nuu Tol rahii hai

ik kuRi jidaa naam muhabbat
gum hai gum hai gum hai

shaam Dhale baazaaraaN de jad moRaaN te khushbuu ugdi hai
vehal, thakaavaT, bechainii jad chauraaheyaaN te aa juRdi hai
raule lippi tanhaaii vich os kuRi di thuR khaaNdi hai
os kuRi di thuR disdi hai

ik kuRi jidaa naam muhabbat
gum hai gum hai gum hai

har chhin maiNu yuuN lagdaa hai, har din maiNu yuuN lagdaa hai
jooRe jashan te bheeRaaN vichoN, jooRii mahak de jhurmaT vichoN
o maiNu aawaaz davegi, maiN ohnu pahchaan lavaaNgaa
o maiNu pahchaan lavaagii

par es raule de haR vichoN koi maiNu aawaaz na deNda
koi vi mere vall na vehndaa
par khore kyoN Tapala lagda, par khore kyoN jhaulla paiNda
har din har ik bheeR juRii choN, but ohnda jyuuN langh ke jaandaa
par maiNu hi nazar na aaunda, par maiNu hi nazar na aaunda

gum gayii maiN us kuRi de, chehre de vich gummeyaa rahNdaa
os de gham vich khuRdaa rahndaa

ek kuRi jida naam muhabbat
gum hai gum hai gum hai

os kuRi nu meri sauN hai, os kuRi nu apni sauN hai
os kuRi nu jag di sauN hai, os kuRi nu rab di sauN hai
je kite paRdi sundi hove, jyuuNdii jaa o mar rahi hove
ik vaari aa ke mil jaave, vafaa meri nu daaGh naa laave
nahiiN taaN methoN jiyaa naa jaaNdaa
geet koi likheyaa nahiiN jaaNdaa

ik kuRi jidaa naam muhabbat
gum hai gum hai gum hai

By: parveen

parveen — Thu, 16 Apr 2009 05:47:20 +0000

this is most sad and good nazm of world. mere khal nal har kise de nal eh ghatana gati hai bhavee uh jina margi apne ap nu brahamchari kyo na samje. ” i like this nazm very much”

By: tanhaa

tanhaa — Thu, 22 Nov 2007 04:47:14 +0000

Sameer,

Glad you liked it. I agree, it is a beautiful beautiful nazm.

Amit

By: Sameer Ahuja

Sameer Ahuja — Thu, 22 Nov 2007 01:36:52 +0000

Hi Amit,

This is beautiful. Thank you.

http://rabbism.blogspot.com/2007/11/ishtihaar-original-poem-by-shiv-kumar.html

By: tanhaa

tanhaa — Thu, 20 Sep 2007 21:13:40 +0000

I’m not sure whether Punjabi poetry follows the same rules as Urdu be’hr, but if I were to take a guess at it, due to the flexibility this meter has .. it must be a variant of Mir’s Hindi meter which has the following structure:
22 – 22 – 22 – 22 – 22 – 22 – 22 – 2

where each (and any) odd number 2 can be replaced by 11 so ultimately it can take this form as well:

211-211-211-211-211-211-211-2(1)

This is just a guess after briefly trying to figure out the meter of the nazm. (By the way, as far as I know, this is not a Ghazal, although I can’t say for sure whether one would classify this as a “geet” or “nazm” but definitely not a Ghazal.

By: satpal

satpal — Thu, 20 Sep 2007 09:53:35 +0000

sir, i am very glad to see the shiv poem on your site, i respect shiv as my guru i have not seen him alive but i have read everything he wrote.
thanks again , i was actually searching for ghazal meter.

ragards
sat pal